Take a dip into my heart, where hopefully you won't fall apart.
Friday, March 4, 2011
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i coexist with you. you are the summer to my blue. forever you, forever you. love me, love me. i still love you. damn the existence of the wretched thing. i dont want to love you anymore, yet i do. i wish i never met you.
Obviously, I already mentioned how love poems don't really have a connection to me (because I've never been in love, or even thought that I've been in love), however, I can understand and imagine myself in this position, and, well ... I think you captured it well. I don't have a fave line; I love them all equally. Really. And the simple structure and simple syntax and thoughts. Also, I'm going to assume--correct me if I'm wrong; I don't like to assume things about people I don't know so well because I hate it when people who don't know me assume to know me, as well--that this is more or less a personal poem to you. That you wrote it out of something you actually feel. (If it's true, I'm a psychic! No, but if it's true then I'm gonna tell you I assumed this because unlike you other poems this one is simple and to the point, no imagery because this is more than enough. And then, there's not much ... repetition (not of repeating words, phrases, but of repeating the idea through different examples, which you usually do), so it's clear you only had one way of saying. And, that's probably why I like this poem. I actually copied it down in my journal.
While I'm sure it's aimed at a lover's love, to me it can also apply to someone who was or is important to you or someone who you care about even when they don't deserve it. Sigh, I love how I just made your specific poem apply to everyone not just broken loves. :)
I highly recommend you write more poems like this one, where you just state your idea once--don't worry, I like your other poems, too; both long and short poems are dear to me, trust me. :). And always write from the heart, which I know you already know, but it's true. Don't ever try to force words that aren't coming to you. :)
Obviously, I already mentioned how love poems don't really have a connection to me (because I've never been in love, or even thought that I've been in love), however, I can understand and imagine myself in this position, and, well ... I think you captured it well. I don't have a fave line; I love them all equally. Really. And the simple structure and simple syntax and thoughts. Also, I'm going to assume--correct me if I'm wrong; I don't like to assume things about people I don't know so well because I hate it when people who don't know me assume to know me, as well--that this is more or less a personal poem to you. That you wrote it out of something you actually feel. (If it's true, I'm a psychic! No, but if it's true then I'm gonna tell you I assumed this because unlike you other poems this one is simple and to the point, no imagery because this is more than enough. And then, there's not much ... repetition (not of repeating words, phrases, but of repeating the idea through different examples, which you usually do), so it's clear you only had one way of saying. And, that's probably why I like this poem. I actually copied it down in my journal.
ReplyDeleteWhile I'm sure it's aimed at a lover's love, to me it can also apply to someone who was or is important to you or someone who you care about even when they don't deserve it. Sigh, I love how I just made your specific poem apply to everyone not just broken loves. :)
I highly recommend you write more poems like this one, where you just state your idea once--don't worry, I like your other poems, too; both long and short poems are dear to me, trust me. :). And always write from the heart, which I know you already know, but it's true. Don't ever try to force words that aren't coming to you. :)
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Alma
WOW, I wrote a lot. :)
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Alma